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the two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

the two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
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The two maps illustrate the developments which took place in the
town
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 of Denham between 1986 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, comparisons of the two maps
reveals
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 a change from a biggest rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1986, the
town
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 had a
lot
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lot of
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 cows. Farmland with a large number of animals, but during the next years the
town
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable that all cows of the south and east farmlands were left with different shops along the railway line being knocked down and replaced by individual houses.
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, the primary school increased its territory and a large house was renamed on the retirement home. Only a bridge on the northern part of 
town
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 remained.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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