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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
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This
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 line graph provides the rate of individuals unemployed in Australia per
quarter
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 of the year in 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest rate of unemployment was in Rural places in the first period,
while
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 Urban
areas
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 were the lowest. It is interesting to notice that in the first
quarter
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, Urban
areas
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 had approximately 2.5 unemployment,
Whereas
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 in Rural places was around 6.5 per
cent
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. The proportion of unemployment increased slightly in the first
quarter
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. After that, there is a significant fall in the second
quarter
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 of the year.
Moreover
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, Rural
areas
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 had an increase in the same period.
For example
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, it was almost 4.5 per
cent
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,
then
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 increased to nearly 5.5 per
cent
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 in the following year.
In addition
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, there was a considerable rise in the Uban
areas
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 it was around 2 per
cent
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,
then
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 became 4 per
cent
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 in the same period. In conclusion, the lowest rate was in Urban
areas
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, but Rural places were the highest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quarter, areas, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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