The diagram illustrates how the sugar made from the sugar cane plant.

The diagram illustrates how the sugar made from the sugar cane plant.
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The diagram illustrates the operation of
sugar
production from the
sugar
cane plant.
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, the process is 6 steps so starting with plante can and finishing with glass and
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product To start with ,
the first step is
the canes planting and growing to be mature after 12-18 months from planting. After that, the harvesting season starts when the canes are harvested manually or by a specific machine , and
then
the harvested
sugar
canes are sent to the crushing step to produce the
sugar
juice . In the next stage , the
sugar
juice is purified by a limestone filter and
then
with heat, the juice is concentrated by evaporation to become a syrup. After that, the prepared syrup is sent to the centrifuging stage , where the
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup by utilizing a high-speed rotating machine.
Finally
, the separated crystals are sent to the drying and cooling stage , only
then
the final product is ready to be used for different purposes.
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