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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of engergy in the US in 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of engergy in the US in 1980 with projections until 2030
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The line graph illustrates 2008 data about the U.S
energy
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consumption
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 by fuel from 1980 to projections until 2030.
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,
it is clear that
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 petrol and oil have been the primary source of
energy
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 throughout the periods
while
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 nuclear, solar/wind
,
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 and hydropower have been less consumed. In 1980, petrol and oil
was
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 the highest
source
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sources
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 of
energy
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, around 35
quadrillions
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 of
units
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 were consumed by Americans.
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, it is expected that the figure will be increased significantly by 2030, and the usage will be around 45
quadrillions
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units
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.
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, in the past, the
consumption
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 of natural gas was higher than coal, but Future predictions suggest a reversal, with coal usage expected to surpass natural gas
consumption
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 with slight fluctuations.
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, The usage of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower is relatively less than other mentioned resources.
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 in 1980, all three
energy
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 sources
was
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 utilised around 3 quadrillion
units
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, Future projections anticipate a shift. The
consumption
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 of nuclear
energy
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 is expected to
increased
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slight
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 and approximately 5
quadrillions
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units
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 respectively.
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, Solar/wind and hydropower are expected to grow approximately 2 and 3
quadrillions
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units
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, quadrillions, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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