The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of engergy in the US in 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of engergy in the US in 1980 with projections until 2030
The line graph illustrates 2008 data about the U.S
energy
consumption
by fuel from 1980 to projections until 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
petrol and oil have been the primary source of
energy
throughout the periods
while
nuclear, solar/wind
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and hydropower have been less consumed. In 1980, petrol and oil
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
the highest
source
Fix the agreement mistake
sources
show examples
of
energy
, around 35
quadrillions
of
units
were consumed by Americans.
However
, it is expected that the figure will be increased significantly by 2030, and the usage will be around 45
quadrillions
units
.
Furthermore
, in the past, the
consumption
of natural gas was higher than coal, but Future predictions suggest a reversal, with coal usage expected to surpass natural gas
consumption
with slight fluctuations.
In contrast
, The usage of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower is relatively less than other mentioned resources.
Although
in 1980, all three
energy
sources
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
utilised around 3 quadrillion
units
, Future projections anticipate a shift. The
consumption
of nuclear
energy
is expected to
increased
Change the verb
increase
show examples
slight
Change the word
slightly
show examples
and approximately 5
quadrillions
units
respectively.
Moreover
, Solar/wind and hydropower are expected to grow approximately 2 and 3
quadrillions
units
respectively.
Submitted by sadiahussain028 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, quadrillions, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: