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You are spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a fairly central heating system. The manager promised contact you regarding compensation but you still heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel in the letter. Describe the problem at the hotel. Explain what the manager had said at the time. Say what you wanted the manager to do

#night #hotel #noise #system #manager #contact #compensation #time
Dear Sir , The reason why I am addressing to explain some problems with
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the heating
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heating
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the heating
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 system in the
hotel
 that
make
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had
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bad
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effect
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affected
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on my
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my
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on my
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 health during
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my stay
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stay
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my stay
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 so I wanted
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to pay
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pay
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to pay
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 compensation from your
hotel
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for this
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this
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for this
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 situation.
Last
 week I visited your city for my work and my work maintaining
long
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 time
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 I had to stay
hotel
 .
Then
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help
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for help
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 from
residents
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residents'
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accommation
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accommodation
for
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apply
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stay
this
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in this
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 city they recommend your
hotel
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hotel's
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best place and
exellent
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excellent
 service .
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, I am not
satisfying
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from
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with
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 your service because I faced
trouble
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a trouble
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 situation.To explain, there
fault
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faulty
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 central heating system
negative
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negatively
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effect
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affected
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 my health
that
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apply
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.
As a
result
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result,
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 I have
headache
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a headache
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 and
high
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a high
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 temperature
aslo
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also
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called
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call
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amblunace
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ambulance
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 that moment.
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, that night I
feel
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 very bad condition.
Also
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 that time you
promise
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promised
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 me
tackled
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tackle
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this
 matter. But I
am
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have
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 not still heard
you
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 news. So I demand you reliable solution. I regard as you
responsible
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a responsible
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 person for
this
 issue and you
need
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need to
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 resolve
this
 problem.I wanted you
help
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 me tackle it soon. I hope you understand my situation and take into account my request.
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Your
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 faithfully, Mahliyo Azimova
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with a distinct opening, body paragraphs, and closing. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Utilize varied sentence structures and transitions to improve the flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task more completely: describe the problem in more detail, clearly explain what the manager had said, and specify what compensation or action you seek.
Task Achievement
Employ a consistently polite and formal tone suitable for a letter of complaint.
General Writing Skills
Check for grammar mistakes and typos to improve the clarity and professionalism of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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