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You are taking a course at a local collage .The deadline for your project was but you havenʼt finished it -introduce yourself. -explain why you havenʼt handed in the project yet. -request more time to do it.

#course #collage #deadline #project #havenʼt #-introduce #-explain #-request #time
Dear Sir, The purpose of writing
this
 letter is to apologize for a problem.I will explain
this
 problem now. I have been attending your local course since
last
 week.My name is Anna .I think
,
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you know me.I was taking
to
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the course at 2oʼclock.It has twenty
peopleʼs
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people
.If you remember
this
 course,we were working on a
project
. You asked us to find a meaningful event in the history of our town.I was supposed to finish
this
project
 today but I could not finish
this
project
.There are many reasons for
this
.
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,I got sick and I
come
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 from the hospital today. But I searched for
this
 event in a book and could not find it .I found information about it on the internet now,
however
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 it will take some time to write .I want to ask you for some time for the
project
 . So I want to apologize to you ,but If you give
men
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me
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 two weeks for
this
project
 ,I
would
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 definitely finish it. Thanks for your time. Yours faithfully, Norquvvatova Shahrizoda
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Structure Improvement
Make sure to structure your letter more clearly with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Introduce yourself and the purpose of the letter immediately, providing a smoother transition into the explanation and request.
Coherence Enhancement
Use a variety of cohesive devices (e.g., moreover, however, in addition) to link ideas and paragraphs together more effectively. This will help your letter flow more naturally.
Detail and Example Enhancement
Provide more detailed and specific explanations for the delay in your project submission. Detailed examples will make your situation more understandable and your request more persuasive.
Grammar and Vocabulary
Consider revising for grammatical accuracy and appropriate word choice to strengthen the clarity of your message. Pay special attention to subject-verb agreement, article use, and the correct use of prepositions.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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