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you are taking a course at a local cellege. The deadline for your project was last week but you haven't finished it. • introduce yourself • explain why you haven't handed in the project yet • request more time to do ot

#course #cellege #deadline #project #week #haven #request #time #ot
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Dear Bob, Hope you are well. The reason why I am writing
this
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 letter is missed a
project
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 deadline and will avoid
this
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 situation in the future. I am Jasmina
which
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I
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 am taking a course at a local
cellege
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college
.I will ask apologize from you. I know that
this
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project
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 is very significant to your company. I will meet with you which will talk about
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project
Add an article
the project
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. I hope that you are not unhappy. A few days ago, my sister was birthday. I did
works
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work
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 at home for
birthday
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my birthday
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 and I missed a
project
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 deadline. I think you
are understood
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understand
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 my condition. I believe that I will finish
this
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project
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 soon, and today, I work
in
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on
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this
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project
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 all day. I heard that
this
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 condition resulted in your company losing an important client. I will try to solve
this
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 problem. I promise to finish
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project
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the project
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 soon. Youth sincerely, Jasmina Khudoyberdiyeva
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introduction
Make sure your introduction sets a clear context for the reader and directly addresses the task's requirements. Clearly state the purpose of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay more logically. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and progress smoothly to the next. Using linking words effectively can help with this.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your reasons. Instead of merely stating you missed the deadline due to a family event, explain how the event required your participation and impacted your ability to complete the project.
conclusion
Ensure your conclusion effectively summarizes your points and includes a clear request or statement about what you hope will happen next.
accuracy
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Errors can detract from the clarity of your message. For instance, 'cellege' should be 'college', and 'Youth sincerely' should be 'Yours sincerely'.
vocabulary
Use more specific vocabulary to accurately express your ideas. Instead of saying 'I did works at home for birthday', say 'I was busy preparing for my sister's birthday celebration, which took up most of my time.'

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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