The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.
The picture gives the sequence of the recycling of
glass
into 5 steps with notes.
The first step is
to put the
bottle
into a recycle bin. The
glass
should be put into a specific bin.
Therefore
, the garbage truck could recognize which of the stuff needs to
collect
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to the treatment plant. After all the
glass
is collected, the third step is to clean all the material, putting the
glass
into the washing and sterilising machine. Before
remodeling
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the
glass
, the
bottle
of
glass
model to different shapes is low effectively.
Thus
,
the
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in the
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fourth step, the
bottle
needs to be broken down into small pieces and
to
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put
in
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at
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a high temperature to melt it to become liquid,an easy way to use liquid.
Last
but not least, putting the liquid into the model of product shape. Once the shape cools down, the
glass
bottle
will be reused to become a product and
deliver
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it
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to the supermarket.
Then
the
glass
would be into a circle of
recycle
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.
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