The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.
The picture gives the sequence of the recycling of
glass
into 5 steps with notes.
The first step is
to put the bottle
into a recycle bin. The glass
should be put into a specific bin.
Therefore
, the garbage truck could recognize which of the stuff needs to collect
to the treatment plant.
After all the Wrong verb form
be collected
glass
is collected, the third step is to clean all the material, putting the glass
into the washing and sterilising machine.
Before remodeling
the Change the spelling
remodelling
glass
, the bottle
of glass
model to different shapes is low effectively.
Thus
,the
fourth step, the Change preposition
in the
bottle
needs to be broken down into small pieces and to
put Fix the infinitive
apply
in
a high temperature to melt it to become liquid,an easy way to use liquid.
Change preposition
at
Last
but not least, putting the liquid into the model of product shape. Once the shape cools down, the glass
bottle
will be reused to become a product and deliver
Wrong verb form
delivered
it
to the supermarket.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Then
the glass
would be into a circle of recycle
.Change the verb form
recycling
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