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The picture below shows Bell Hill farm in 1976 and the changes that took place in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The map indicates the changes in Bell Hill
farm
 over a 30-year period.
Overall
, it can be seen that the area witnessed dramatic changes over three decades, especially when the
farm
 was completely transformed into an
Environment Centre
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environmental centre
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. In 1976 there was a farmyard in the middle and it was totally replaced by a recreation area in 2006.
Additionally
, the barn, which was behind the farmyard in 1976 was converted multimedia room in 2006.
Moreover
, in 1976 north side of the
farm
 contained cowsheds and a chicken area.
In contrast
, it was removed and a new student housing was built in 2006.
In addition
, a farmhouse was situated east side and remained a constant place until 2006.
On the other hand
, the storage for
farm
 machinery was on the southwest angle and redeveloped into car parking.
Finally
, the roads on the southeast angle were
also
 not altered and remained similar in 1976.
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structure
Clearly specify the introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion. An effective introduction sets the context and mentions what the essay will talk about. A conclusion should summarise the main points and restate the overall trend or change.
coherence
Utilize a wider range of cohesive devices to help the essay flow better. Currently, the essay jumps from one point to another abruptly. More transitional phrases and linkers would improve readability.
support
Support your main points with more detailed examples. While the essay mentions the changes in a straightforward manner, elaborating with more specifics can enhance understanding and engagement.
overview
Enhance the overview by mentioning the most significant changes or trends. While a general summary is present, highlighting the key transformations adds depth to your overview.

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