Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

People throughout the world are dramatically willing to own a private car in recent decades which caused many mega
cities
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heavy traffic daily. I believe
this
issue which is
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is happening so, steps should be taken by governments to control
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it becomes chaos. Traffic all around the world is undeniable if we look thoroughly
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cosmopolitan
cities
where you have to wait hours to reach your destination. As we see in
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cities
such
as Beijing, Tehran and Mexico
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we obviously observe the difficulties city dwellers are facing with.
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instance, I live in Tehran and when I want to commute to my workplace I have to use GPS to check which route is faster, as it is well known that single occupancy of cars causes
this
problem
. But it raises the question why? Mainly because infrastructures are insufficient in
this
regard. Public transport is critical and more
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subway
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,
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buses are needed, let alone modification in street
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also
seems essential. What can be done? There are some ways to resolve
this
problem
in affected countries.
Firstly
, they need to organize the cars on streets, like no single occupancy to be allowed unless it is an emergency.
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they need to improve the transportation industry regarding
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public transport means and
it's
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infrastructures as we know the more public transport
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available, the easier it will be for people to be transferred .
Therefore
,
cities
will be calm and people will not purchase new
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for
this
matter.
Finally
, there should a cultural training by
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to illustrate the potential problems
while
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car. Ultimately,
although
it's a burden on governments, it should be solved by any means in order not to exacerbate the condition. In conclusion, we can infer that traffic
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are going to be ubiquitous
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all over the world among big
cities
and even international consensus and cooperation
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needed among countries to overcome
this
situation which is absolutely difficult and I hope that
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problem
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figured out as soon as possible.
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