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Average Daily Sales by Serving in winter and summer

#sales #winter #summer
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The bar chart details average daily sales (by total number of servings) at a restaurant
according to
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 season. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that warmer food products were much more popular in the
winter
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,
while
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 the inverse is true in the
summer
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. Hot coffee is the most common order generally and salads’ popularity does not vary
according to
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 the season. There are approximately 75 servings of hot coffee sold during the
winter
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 and just 30 in the
summer
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.
Similarly
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, soup is twice as popular in the
summer
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 months with 50 orders compared to only 25 in
winter
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.
In contrast
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, there are hardly any iced coffees sold in
winter
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, and nearly 40 are purchased in the
summer
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.
This
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 is comparable to ice creams bought (38 in
summer
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) though the
winter
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 figure is relatively high (27). The only exception to the pattern of seasonal ordering is salads with roughly 25 orders for each half of the year.
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