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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everythin organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about it?

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Our home is the mirror of our personality. Few people think that it's necessary to keep house and working areas clean and
stuffs
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stuff
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are organize
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are organized
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. I strongly agree
on
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this
 as home and
workingplace
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workplace
working place
 are the places we usually
occupied
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occupy
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.
Home
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Homes
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 with organized
stuffs
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stuff
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 are appealing to the eyes, easy to move around the areas and immediately find things needed.
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, shoes and clothes have each cabinet, food supplies and other kitchen essentials
place
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on
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 pantry areas, and stuff that
not
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 usually used must
keep
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be kept
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 in
storage
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the storage
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 room.
Futheremore
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Furthermore
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clean
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 working environment can make us comfortable
while
 working and our mind is at ease. It helps us to be productive
as
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 no
distruction
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destruction
distraction
while
 working.
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, we can concentrate
for
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 our
task
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tasks
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 and
assignment
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 and finish as early
with
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 the deadlines,
in
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which we will be able to spend our extra time
for
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 other important
matter
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.
In addition
,
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the staffs
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staffs
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 portfolio easily to locate if needed as it is organized with designated labels.
To sum up
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with
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proper organization of stuff and
tidy
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a tidy
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 environment gives more comfort and peace to individuals as there's no time wasted.
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coherence cohesion
To improve your score, focus on developing a clear structure for your essay. This means having a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should have a clear main idea that is expanded with explanations and examples.
task achievement
Be sure to answer all parts of the prompt in your response. Your essay should not only express your opinion but also discuss the reasons behind it. Include relevant examples to support your points. Additionally, aim for clarity in your ideas by organizing them logically and ensuring each paragraph contributes to your overall argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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