The table below shows the consumption of wheat, rice, maize in 4 different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of wheat, rice, maize in 4 different countries.
This
is a table that illustrates the intake of
calories
in four different territories. By and large,
rice
is consumed highly in
cambodi
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Cambodia
,
while
maize
in
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is
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not
in
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the list
of
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Poland.
Rice
mainly in
camboodi
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Cambodia
while
maize
in Mexico, making
wheat
greted
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greeted
in the population of Poland. People in
camboodi
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Cambodia
consume great
calories
more than 1000 compared with the
wheat
18
calaroies
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calories
salaries
.
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,
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Poland consumes 865
calories
in
wheat
making the remaining two less than twenty. Egypt has over 1000
calaroies
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calories
salaries
of
wheat
and approximately
by
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half of
rice
and
wheat
. Mexican individuals intake is
rised
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raised
in
maize
1083 per day and
least
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in
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rice
57
calories
per person,
on the other
hand
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wheat
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wheat,
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is 275
calories
. It seems every population has
preference
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,
rice
in
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Cambodia
camboodi
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Camboodi
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,
wheat
in Egypt and
maize
in
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Mexico
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mexico
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Mexico
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