The table below shows the consumption of wheat, rice, maize in 4 different countries.
This
is a table that illustrates the intake of calories
in four different territories.
By and large, rice
is consumed highly in cambodi
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Cambodia
while
maize
in
not Correct your spelling
is
in
the list Change preposition
on
of
Poland. Change preposition
in
Rice
mainly in camboodi
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Cambodia
while
maize
in Mexico, making wheat
greted
in the population of Poland.
People in Correct your spelling
greeted
camboodi
consume great Correct your spelling
Cambodia
calories
more than 1000 compared with the wheat
18 calaroies
. Correct your spelling
calories
salaries
While
,
Poland consumes 865 Remove the comma
apply
calories
in wheat
making the remaining two less than twenty.
Egypt has over 1000 calaroies
of Correct your spelling
calories
salaries
wheat
and approximately by
half of Change preposition
apply
rice
and wheat
. Mexican individuals intake is rised
in Correct your spelling
raised
maize
1083 per day and least
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the least
in
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apply
rice
57 calories
per person, on the other
hand
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hand,
wheat
is 275 Add the comma(s)
wheat,
calories
.
It seems every population has preference
, Add an article
a preference
rice
in Correct your spelling
Cambodia
camboodi
, Change the capitalization
Camboodi
wheat
in Egypt and maize
in Change the capitalization
Mexico
mexico
Change the capitalization
Mexico
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