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The table below shows the consumption of wheat, rice, maize in 4 different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of wheat, rice, maize in 4 different countries.
This
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 is a table that illustrates the intake of
calories
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 in four different territories. By and large,
rice
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 is consumed highly in
cambodi
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Cambodia
,
while
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maize
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in
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is
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 not
in
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on
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 the list
of
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in
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 Poland.
Rice
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 mainly in
camboodi
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Cambodia
while
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maize
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 in Mexico, making
wheat
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greted
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greeted
 in the population of Poland. People in
camboodi
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Cambodia
 consume great
calories
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 more than 1000 compared with the
wheat
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 18
calaroies
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calories
salaries
.
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,
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 Poland consumes 865
calories
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 in
wheat
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 making the remaining two less than twenty. Egypt has over 1000
calaroies
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calories
salaries
 of
wheat
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 and approximately
by
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half of
rice
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 and
wheat
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. Mexican individuals intake is
rised
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raised
 in
maize
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 1083 per day and
least
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in
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rice
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 57
calories
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 per person,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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wheat
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wheat,
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 is 275
calories
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. It seems every population has
preference
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a preference
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,
rice
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 in
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Cambodia
camboodi
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Camboodi
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,
wheat
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 in Egypt and
maize
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 in
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Mexico
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mexico
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Mexico
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, rice, maize, wheat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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