The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates where the
budget
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in two different years(2017 and 2018) in one region of the UK comes from and the pie charts demonstrate how it is
allowcated
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allocated
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. The National Government supported the most financial supplies in 2017, which was 175.5m. The
budget
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from Local Taxes was around
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half of which from the National Government, reaching 91.2m, followed by 38m from other sources. The
budget
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from Local
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Taxes sharply increased to 102.3m in 2018,
while
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the
budget
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from
National
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Government and other sources mildly increased.
As a result
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, the total
budget
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also
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increased. The salaries account three fourth in 2017, followed by the money spent on buildings and transport(17%) which is around two times bigger than the money spent on technology(8%).
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the
propotion
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proportion
of
salariers
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salaries
was still the most in 2018, it
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through a decrease, which was 69% in 2018. The
propotion
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proportion
of buildings and transport remains.
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, the total
budget
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increase especially
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from Local Taxes, the money spent more on technology and less on salaries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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