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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

#company #place #hotel #feedback #participants #food #lunch #manager #future
Dear Sir My name is Quang Le and I
was
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recently organised an event in your
hotel
. Everything
were
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was
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 so good, the rooms for guests were
clean_the
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clean
 lobby was so fancy and your employee
maked
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made
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 a very warm welcome for us. All the participants I met after the meeting,
they
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said they
realy
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really
 liked the
hotel
,
essecially
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especially
 the way
employee
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employees
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 in your
hotel
 served our group and the
hotel
looks
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looked
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 so beautiful and fancy. There was only one thing, they were unhappy
that
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with
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 the food _
you
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your
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hotel
was
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served us for lunch. It was not too bad but
this
 meeting
were
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was
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 the
last
 meal of our company
at the end
 of the year. It was very important and my boss
do
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did
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 not like it too. The way to
served
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serve
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 the food
quite
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is quite
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 slow and the meat has
the
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a
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 smell. I do not know when did they buy it but they had a
bag
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bad
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 smell. I think you need to contact
with
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the chef at your
hotel
 and investigate why it
happen
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happened
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. I suggest that you need to train your kitchen team a little bit and serve the food more
quitly
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quietly
quickly
instead
 of slowly like before. We hope to cooperate with your
hotel
 to improve the quality of your
hotel
. Best
regrard
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regards
regard
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coherence cohesion
To improve your logical structure, ensure that your letter flows logically from one point to another. Consider using transition words or phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
For a better greeting and closing, try using more formal and appropriate phrases. Instead of 'Dear Sir', use 'Dear [Manager's Name or Position]' if possible, and end your letter with 'Yours sincerely' followed by your full name.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a single idea per paragraph but develop it further. Expand on why the food was unsatisfactory and how it impacted the overall experience. Provide more specific suggestions for how the hotel can improve.
task achievement
To completely address the task, ensure that you clearly state the main points of your letter in the opening paragraph. While you've covered the required points, clarity in summarizing your intentions at the beginning will enhance understanding.
task achievement
Adopt a more formal and polite tone throughout the letter. Avoid phrases that are too informal for this context. Use complete sentences and check for grammatical correctness to maintain a suitable tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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