Write about the following topic: In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In recent years , it is obvious
in
that many youth prefer to start Change preposition
apply
work- based
training rather than completing their study Correct your spelling
work-based
in
the Change preposition
at
university
in majority of countries. While
Choosing to start work early has many advantages , it also
has a lot of disadvantages .
On one hand, There are many advantages for
preferring to begin directly in Change preposition
to
work- based
training .Correct your spelling
work-based
Firstly
, This
can help young people
to gain money and become independent earlier than their climates who choosing
to complete their studies for some years. Change the form of the verb
choose
In addition
, they acquire practical skills directly. For
example
Add a comma
example,
Work -based
training Add a hyphen
Work-based
reduce
the financial burden on the individual and their families. Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
Moreover
, the training can provide individuals to become specialized in a particular industry such
as the petrol gas companies in Saudi Arabia. These companies have their own Educational training that provide
their workers with practical training which Change the verb form
provides
enhance
their roles in the future.
Correct subject-verb agreement
enhances
On the other hand
, There
are many drawbacks for young Fix capitalization
there
people
who decided
to choose work-based training rather than going to Wrong verb form
decide
university
. Individuals who do not go to university
may have a lack of theoretical information. Also
, Studying in
Change preposition
at
the
Correct article usage
a
university
expand
Correct subject-verb agreement
expands
people
knowledge in many fields Change noun form
people's
such
as engineering , medicine and computer science. Besides
, Many
jobs Fix capitalization
many
requires
a qualification or degree from Change the verb form
require
known
Add an article
a known
university
. It can be seen as a social merit to be get
Change the verb form
get
high
education in some Correct word choice
a higher
society
Fix the agreement mistake
societies
such
as Arab countries . People
judge people
from
many criteria and Education is the most common Change preposition
on
criteria
in those countries. Fix the agreement mistake
criterion
Finally
, Individual
can Fix the agreement mistake
Individuals
gain
more money when they have a Verb problem
earn
university
degree namely doctors and engineering.
In conclusion, Deciding to choose work- based
training or going to Add a hyphen
work-based
university
based
on the type of work and the goals of the person. As there are advantages and disadvantages Add a missing verb
is based
for
work-based training , It is a personal choice Change preposition
to
at the end
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task achievement
The introduction should clearly present your viewpoint and directly answer the question regarding whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Make sure your conclusion succinctly summarizes your arguments, presenting a clear stance.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples from your own experience or knowledge to support your arguments about the advantages and disadvantages. This will make your essay more persuasive and relevant.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay could benefit from clearer topic sentences that introduce the main idea of each paragraph. This helps the reader understand the structure of your arguments better.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using more complex linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. This will enhance the flow of your essay and make your arguments more coherent.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that all sentences within the paragraph support this central idea. Avoid including unrelated or contradictory information.
Your opinion
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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
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