You recently went to a concert amd thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer.I your letter say how you feel about his perfomance, give details of your musical activities, Exlpain how you would like hm to help you with your muscial activities.

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Dear

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sir

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, My name is Parth

patel

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and I

have stay

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Taj

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the Taj

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hotel

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month. Where was your musical concert

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saturday

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I have First time to listening

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concert and your voice is so clear and nice. In

this

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infrom

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inform

in from

some learn For singing

activities

with you. Your

perfomance

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performance

is very good and

you

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play Gitar is so

awesowe

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awesome

. I will enjoy all

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song

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which you

were

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singing. I'll

also

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you sing "Tu Jane Na" from

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movies. It is my

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fevrit

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favourite

movie and

song

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for

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your singing

activities

. like musical

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instrument

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and your clear voice and how to eat and drink For your fitness.

Also

your group

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and power. I need your help

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compition

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singer

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in my city But I need your Idea and how to

parform

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perform

in Odiyance

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infant

stage

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. I hope you

provied

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provide

provided

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trick

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tecnices

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techniques

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. Your Faithfully, Parth

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Task Achievement

Begin your letter with a clear statement of purpose. For example: 'I am writing to express my admiration for your performance at the concert I attended last month at the Taj Hotel.' This establishes a direct connection with your reader and clarifies your intent.

Coherence & Cohesion

Improve your spelling and punctuation to enhance clarity. For example, 'Gitar' should be 'guitar', 'Odiyance infunt of stage' could be 'audience in front of the stage'. Consistent use of proper spelling and punctuation will make your letter more professional and easier to understand.

Coherence & Cohesion

Organize your thoughts into clear, distinct paragraphs. One idea per paragraph will help the reader follow your thoughts more easily. For instance, one paragraph can be about your admiration for the singer's performance, another about your musical activities, followed by a paragraph explaining how you wish for their help.

Task Achievement

Adopt a more formal tone suitable for writing to someone you do not know personally. Avoid using slang or colloquial expressions, and strive for a polite and respectful tone throughout your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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8 paragraphs

179 words

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