The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in UK in the year 2005 Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in UK in the year 2005

Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides data about the
proportion
of all men and women employees at nine job positions in
United
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Kingdom in the year 2005. It can be seen that the employment trends of all men and women were completely different,
while
the
proportion
of men
at
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skilled trades was highest, the
proportion
of women was lowest. Speaking of male workers, they had
trend
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a trend
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to work
at
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fields
such
as skilled trades, managers and senior officials, professional, associate professional and technical (
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accounted
for about 20
percent
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, 18
percent
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, 14
percent
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and 13
percent
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respectively).
By contrast
, other fields
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accounted
low
proportion
, specifically, process, plant and machine operatives and elementary were about 12
percent
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, sale and customer
service
and administrative and secretarial were about 5
percent
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, personal
service
was about 2
percent
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. As regards female workers, they had
trend
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a trend
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to work
at
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administrative and secretarial, associate professional and technical, personal
service
and
sale
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sales
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and customer
service
(
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accounted
for about 22%, 15%, 14% and 13% respectively.
In addition
, managers and senior officials, professional and elementary were just about 12%.
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jobs
had
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that had
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lowest
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the lowest
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percentage were skilled trades and process, plant and machine operatives (just about 2%).
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