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the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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encompass
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 the
people
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’s preferences and
consumptions
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consumption
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 of
coffee
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 and tea in five distinct areas of
australia
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Australia
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. Generally speaking, in five distinct areas almost half of
people
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 bought
coffee
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 or tea when they had gone to a cafe. The most number of
people
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went
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who went
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 to
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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is
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belonged to Melbourne. Following
the
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Melbourne,
hobart
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Hobart
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 comes with almost in some proportion. The consumption of fresh
coffee
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 experienced a proportion below 45
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percent
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per cent
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 in all cities. The majority of
people
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preferedinstant
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preferred instant
caffee
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coffee
 rather than the fresh ones. In
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Brisbane
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brisbane
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brisbane,
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whereas
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 approximately 52
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 opted to drink instant
caffee
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coffee
, less than 35
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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choosed
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chose
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the
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apply
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instant ones.
To sum up
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,
people
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’s prominent option among beverages is
coffee
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 during the
last
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 four
week
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weeks
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.
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 ratio of
the
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fresh
caffee
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coffee
 consumption
below
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is below
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the
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apply
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40
percent
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 in three cities
that
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apply
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encompassing
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including
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hobart
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Hobart
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, adeliaide,
brisbane
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and brisbane
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, in other
who
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apply
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cities proportion of fresh
coffee
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 consumption
above
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is above
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the
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apply
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40
percent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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