The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates the data about average weekly spending by families in one country in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
, the food section
takes the largest part of their spending, especially in 1968. On the other hand
, fuel and power have been the lowest level of their cost.
As can obviously see
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be seen
that
in 1968 had the highest proportion in the food Correct word choice
apply
section
, reaching exactly 35% of weekly income, while
it only
about 17% spent on food in 2018. Add a missing verb
was only
Moreover
, the leisure section
in 2018 is the second highest amount of consumption, achieved around 22%. However
, it just spent around 8% in the Leisure section
in 1968. Furthermore
, it has a similar growth rate in the housing section
, which was 10% in 1968 and increased to about 19% in 2018.
On the other hand
, in household goods section
, remained at the same level approximately 8% in both 1968 and 2018. Coincidently, the personal goods and the transport parts in 1968 have the same spending proportion, which is around 8%, while
the former decreased to about 4% in 2018, and the latter increased to an estimated 14%.Submitted by 90nini15yu on
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