Some people believe that is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
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elderly
older
person
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people
this
statement because all elderly people
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. I think some old humans
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, one of the
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get
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gets
advice
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. So, her working
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study
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humans
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from old people
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humans
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offer
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