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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

In current
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time
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times
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, people
likes
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like
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 to go
large
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to large
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malls
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 for shopping ,
due to
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this
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 reason ,many local
shops
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 have closed. In my point of view ,
this
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 can be seen as
positive
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a positive
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 development because it saves
time
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 to do other activities
beside
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besides
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 shopping and
customers
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 do not need to bargain
the
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with the
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 local shopowners
for
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to
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 fix the
price
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. People rely on big
malls
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 for shopping to save their valuable
time
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 . People have multiple things to do in their busy lifestyle ,So ,they prefer to shop all the things from one place to save
their
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the
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 rest of the day for their personal chores in daily life .
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 , the
malls
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 have
number
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a number
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 of
shops
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align
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aligned
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to
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with
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 each other and
perfect
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a perfect
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 road map
provide
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provided
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on
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at
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customer
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the customer
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 service desk if
customer
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customers
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 get confused ,
therefore
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 , if
customers
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 want to buy cookies and clothes
then
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 they do not need to drive another 5
minute
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minutes
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 to buy just pack of cookie. A recent study
estimate
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estimates
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 that
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the mall
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mall
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the mall
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 saves
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an average
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average
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an average
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 of 2
hour
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hours
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time
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 of
indvidual
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individual
individuals
 to buy things so that
customers
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 can do their additional activities in
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the other
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other
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the other
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 half of
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the day
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day
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the day
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.
Moreover
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 ,
Customers
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 do not need to
do argument
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argue
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 for
price
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. In local
shops
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 , there are most chances that owners change the
price
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 of the item
according to
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customers
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 but in the mall , stores have fixed prices and clear descriptions of discounted items in the different sections .
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In american
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in American
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eagle
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Eagle
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store
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stores
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, there
is
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are
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 different
section
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sections
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 of 20% or 40 % discounts at the back of
store
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the store
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 for both men and women . Shoppers do not need to bargain to reduce the
price
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 and
also
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 feel
stress free
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stress-free
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 to buy the item easily. In conclusion,
Customers
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 travel to the big
malls
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 and
this
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 results
to
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in
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closure
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the closure
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 of small local
shops
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 .
This
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 is considered as a positive development because
customers
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 save
time
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 for their personal activities and
saves
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save
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 from
malfunction
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malfunctions
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 happening in the local
shops
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 .

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