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traffic
congestion and pollution
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of the best suggestable solutions for these problems is to expand the price
of petrol. In my opinion, I am
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agreeing
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agree
this
statement as there are other effective solutions such
as expansions of public transportation networks.
On the one
hand, increasing the price
of petroleum may be essential for solving the
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traffic
pollution
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decrease
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, employers who work in the same place can use one
vehicle to go to their work instead
of each one
using his own car. Another significant for
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the high
price
petrol
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public transportation and alternative energy vehicles, which could have Correct article usage
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longer-term
traffic
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.
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a decrease
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and helps them to have a good life style
.
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lifestyle
traffic
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such
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