Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam" How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people form using their cars?

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In the modern era, most nations are confronted with problems related to
abundance
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the abundance
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of cars.
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issues are so serious that have harmed humanity and
environment
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the environment
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a lot by polluting the air and making it time-consuming to commute. There are lots of ways that
goverments
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governments
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can tackle these problems like promoting
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public transportation which I'm going to explain more about in the rest of
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with, vehicles have reduced the community health rate in recent years and seriously
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living things. Reduction of air quality is
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difficulty that
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metropolises
face. Pollutants can affect
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and other organs
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the risk of cancer in older members of society to what extent that they shouldn't leave their apartments on some days.
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, it can harm youth too
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make them depressed and cause other mental and physical problems. Tehran,
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, experienced
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135 days
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dangerous air for sensitive members of society who were forbidden to get out of their homes. To tackle these difficulties, governments can take effective steps toward decreasing and even eliminating cars from streets. An obvious
sollution
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solution
is promoting and lowering the costs of public transportation by giving disposable plastic products and other kinds of materials which harm the environment.
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, it can help people to get to their destinations a lot sooner than before and free and help the environment as well. That means even the poorest individuals can use public buses and it can even be a source of income for them. In Germany,
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, individuals can give vending machines three disposable plastic bottles and
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receive a free metro ticket.
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, the rising number of vehicles
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streets
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is an alarm for humanity to combat it. It is a critical issue which requires the cooperation between people and lawmen to rescue the
life
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lives
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of
next
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generations by enticing people to use their automobiles more effectively which I hope becomes
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a reality
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Task Achievement
To improve your score for task achievement, ensure that you address all parts of the prompt thoroughly. This means discussing both the extent to which you agree with the statement provided and offering a detailed range of measures governments can take. In your essay, while you mention the increase in car ownership and propose solutions, you could further develop your viewpoint on the initial statement and provide more varied and deeper examples of potential government measures.
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