The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
The graph below displays the percentages of males in three
age
categories who did have a job in 1984, 2001 and 2014 in Australia.
Overall
, it is obvious that
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categories
35 to 44 showed the highest percentage versus
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the
age
60-64 as they showed the lowest result.
In contrast
,
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categories
categorise
which increased gradually were people over 60-64. In 1984 the
age
group from 15-19 illustrated about 55% but
then
in
2014
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2014,
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decreased
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10%.
Moreover
, individuals who demonstrated
age
35-44 did not
made
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many changes over the years, they remained unchanged.What about the people aged 60-64 they went up
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noticeably
,from 27% to
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approximately
50%.
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