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You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: apologise for the damage to the item explain what happened say how you are going to fix the issue

#friend #apologise #damage #item
Dear Ali, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to apologize
from
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to
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 you
about
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for
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 the
damaged
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damage
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 I caused to
cellphone
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the cellphone
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charger
 I borrowed from you yesterday
and
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apply
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I feel really embarrassed about the incident. When I borrowed the
charger
 from you I
plug
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plugged
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 it in to charge my
cellphone
 but suddenly the power went off and there was no electrical protection between
plug
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the plug
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 and
the
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your
charger
 and when I checked my
cellphone
 I realized that it
is
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was
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 not charging and I guess that your
charger
 has been damaged. So when the power came back I checked your
charger
 again and it did not charge my
cellphone
 and I found out it
has
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had
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 been damaged. So I decided to go to an electrical shop and
make
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get
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 it
fix
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fixed
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. But the technician told me it has been damaged badly and it is unrepairable.
Therefore
, I want to go to the market
this
 weekend and I have planned to buy a new
cellphone
charger
 for you. I look forward to receiving forgiveness from you. Best regards,
khashayar
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Kashyap
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure to structure your letter in clear paragraphs, each serving a distinctive purpose (e.g., opening, explaining the situation, proposing a solution, and closing). This will enhance the logical flow and make your letter more coherent.
Coherence & Cohesion
To further improve coherence, include connecting phrases between paragraphs that signal the progression from apology, to explanation, to resolution.
Task Achievement
For a higher task achievement score, consider adding a sentence to express hope that the proposed solution (purchasing a new charger) is acceptable, thereby fully addressing the 'how you are going to fix the issue' part of the prompt.
General
Consider varying your sentence structure and using a broader range of vocabulary to present your points more compellingly and accurately.
Proofread your letter to correct any grammatical errors such as the use of 'apologize from' which should be 'apologize for.','type':'General

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Borrowed
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Regret
  • Unintentional
  • Circumstances
  • Remedy
  • Repair
  • Replacement
  • Sincerely
  • Forgiveness
  • Rectify
  • Understanding
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