You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: apologise for the damage to the item explain what happened say how you are going to fix the issue

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Dear Ali, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to apologize

from

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you

about

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for

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the

damaged

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damage

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I caused to

cellphone

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the cellphone

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charger

I borrowed from you yesterday

and

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I feel really embarrassed about the incident. When I borrowed the

charger

from you I

plug

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plugged

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it in to charge my

cellphone

but suddenly the power went off and there was no electrical protection between

plug

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the plug

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and

the

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your

charger

and when I checked my

cellphone

I realized that it

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not charging and I guess that your

charger

has been damaged. So when the power came back I checked your

charger

again and it did not charge my

cellphone

and I found out it

has

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had

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been damaged. So I decided to go to an electrical shop and

make

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get

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fix

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fixed

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. But the technician told me it has been damaged badly and it is unrepairable.

Therefore

, I want to go to the market

this

weekend and I have planned to buy a new

cellphone

charger

for you. I look forward to receiving forgiveness from you. Best regards,

khashayar

Correct your spelling

Kashyap

Submitted by khashayarpartovi on Thu Feb 29 2024

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure to structure your letter in clear paragraphs, each serving a distinctive purpose (e.g., opening, explaining the situation, proposing a solution, and closing). This will enhance the logical flow and make your letter more coherent.

Coherence & Cohesion

To further improve coherence, include connecting phrases between paragraphs that signal the progression from apology, to explanation, to resolution.

Task Achievement

For a higher task achievement score, consider adding a sentence to express hope that the proposed solution (purchasing a new charger) is acceptable, thereby fully addressing the 'how you are going to fix the issue' part of the prompt.

General

Consider varying your sentence structure and using a broader range of vocabulary to present your points more compellingly and accurately.

Proofread your letter to correct any grammatical errors such as the use of 'apologize from' which should be 'apologize for.','type':'General

2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Borrowed
Unfortunate incident
Regret
Unintentional
Circumstances
Remedy
Repair
Replacement
Sincerely
Forgiveness
Rectify
Understanding

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