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Students do not respect teachers as much as they did in the past. Do you agree or desagree?

#students #respect #teachers #desagree
Nowadays, there is
opinion
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an opinion
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, that respect for
professors
 has decreased. I totally agree with
this
,because
status
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the status
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 of
this
 profession has fallen and
their
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its
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valur
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value
values
valour
 in
adolescent's
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adolescents'
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 minds is not as great as in the past.           Children do not respect
teachers
, because their reputation is not excellent among
new
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is
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generation. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is
internet
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the internet
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 and bloggers, that provide bad
view
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views
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 about Schotto education in schools or universities. Teenagers have very radical thinking and if they admit one opinion, they will unfriendly with
person
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a person
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, who has
opposite
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the opposite
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.
Child
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A child
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, who
respect
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respects
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to
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apply
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the
theacher
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teacher
, can be bullied,
therefore
 nobody supports and respects
to
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apply
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the
professors
.
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, in my country
number
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the number
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 of people, who desire
be
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to be
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the
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a
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 teacher has decreased.             At present,
importance
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the importance
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 of
teachers
 in student's minds has fallen. There is
popular
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a popular
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 opinion among young people, that
shools
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school
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 curriculum
useless
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is useless
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 and the best and the best resource of knowledge is
internet
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the internet
an internet
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 and social media.
Consequently
,
significance
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the significance
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 of
professors
 is not as big as in the past.
Due to
 these
thoughts
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thoughts,
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 a lot of teenagers do not appreciate
humans
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the humans
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, who teach them in schools.
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,
in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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 there are a lot of posts which
critic
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quality
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the quality
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 of school learning and
teachers
.          In conclusion, I believe adolescents do not value
professors
 in comparison to the past,
due
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because
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 to reputation of
teachers
has
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is
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 reduced.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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