The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The line graph illustrates the
proportion
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of the population of Japanese, Swedish and Americans aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040. It is clearly seen that at the beginning of the period,Japan was the lowest in
proportion
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while
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the Japanese
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were
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predicted to achieve the highest
at the end
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of the given time. In 1940, there was a difference of only about 3% between the USA and Sweden among 65 years old and over and
this
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balance was kept until 1995. Around 2000, older generations of Sweden exceeded Americans and reached 20%.
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over
65 years old
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65-year-old
Americans kept the same pace, their
proportion
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will be foreseen to equalise nearly with Swedish.
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in Japan older people only started at 5% and experienced a slight decrease until 2002, their percentage would increase to 10% in 2025. In spite of the least
proportion
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of the Japanese older population, it is predicted that they will overtake the other two countries and reach the zenith of
ageing
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population approximately 25%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • population aged 65 and over
  • time span
  • initial data points
  • proportions
  • steady increase
  • stagnation
  • decline
  • sharp increase/decrease
  • trends over time
  • fastest growth
  • least change
  • projection
  • predicted proportions
  • societal impacts
  • aging population
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