A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: Explain what you are currently doing Describe your suitability for this area of work Say when you can attend an interview.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to apply for the waiter position in your restaurant-"DIYDOR", that you have advertised in a local newspaper recently. I would really appreciate it if you could spare some of your precious time to
further
discuss my candidacy in a formal interview. Let me explain what I am currently doing. At
present
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present,
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I am
studiying
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studying
at "WEBSTER" university that's located near your restaurant. So, I am a student and I would like to cover my costs. And that's why I decided to apply as a part-time employee. I believe I am the best choice for
this
position as I have a lot of experience in my previous role and
in addition
to
this
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I live so close to your restaurant that takes 5 minutes walk. I am available for the interview on the weekend. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Should you need any
further
details, please don't hesitate to call me. Yours faithfully Pulat
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Task Achievement
To improve the score further on task achievement, consider providing more specific examples of your previous experience which make you suitable for the role. For instance, you mentioned having a lot of experience in your previous role; elaborating on the skills developed or responsibilities held can strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, aim to connect ideas between paragraphs more fluidly. While each paragraph contains a single idea, transitions between them could be enhanced. Using conjunctions or phrases that build upon the previous point can help in creating a more cohesive narrative.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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