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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the growth of industrial
area's
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 now and planned in the
future
 of the site.
Overall
, there are many facilities
increase
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 in the site of
plan
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future
 development
such
 as
playground
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playgrounds
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, medical
checkup
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checkups
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,
school
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schools
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, and
shops
.
Moreover
, the factory will
replace
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 with residential complexes and the street will be added in the
future
.
To begin
 with, the middle of
map
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 in the Norbiton industrial
area's now have
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 eight factories. The east of
factories
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 will
be replace
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with
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school
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schools
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 and the southwest of the roundabout changed by
shops
,
while
others
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 factories will change to
be
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apply
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housing in the
future
. The farmland will change with
house
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a house
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 in the
future
plan
,
while
 the east of
house
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the house
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 will build farmland. Looking at the main square, the east of
shops
 will build medical
checkup
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 to serve residents. Afterwards, there are a lot of road constructions
build
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built
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in
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on
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 the site of
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the future's
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future's
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future
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plan
such
 as
in
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the opposite
of
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shops
 and
in
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the roundabout to the house across the river.
Moreover
, the
plan
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future
also
build
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builds
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bridge
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a bridge
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 to reach the resident's
home
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homes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words future, plan, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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