The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.

The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.
The bar charts
illustrates
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the percentage of energy expenditure in
UK
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the UK
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and USA between 2000 and 2006. Generally, there are five different energy that
has
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been calculated including oil, coal, gas, nuclear
power
and other renewable sources. The information displays the
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data where each of USA and
UK
are
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higher in percentage in some of those five aspects.
UK
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The UK
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has led the usage of gas, nuclear
power
and other renewable sources both in 2000 and 2006.
UK
's highest data was gas with 38% of utilization.
While
the lowest one is the nuclear
power
with only 10%. Other than that,
USA
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the USA
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has led the consumption of oil and coal
in
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every year with the highest percentage of 40%. Meanwhile, the least
power
usage was the
the
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other renewable sources of 5% in 2006.
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