The arts, including art, music and theatre are considered to be important in society. Do you think the arts still have a place amongst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in school programs?
In society nowadays, the arts (music,
art
, theatre) is
still seen as crucial by the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
. I believe that this
is the case since many people
are positively engaged in this
related activity, therefore
it should be taught in school
institution
.
Regarding Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
to
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apply
this
, I believe that art
, especially music, is still highly sought after by people
in general. Many adolescents are having a future plan
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plans
by becoming
well-known Change preposition
to become
singer
, which is the exact reason why Fix the agreement mistake
singers
this
industry always seem
to have endless talents. Correct subject-verb agreement
seems
Besides
adoration and its social status, music is seen as a way to unite people
as it conveys positivity and hope, despite the different background
and languages that the Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
people
faced
. Wrong verb form
face
This
could be seen in a concert, for
example
Coldplay, who could always Add the comma(s)
example,
sold
out their ticket in every Change the verb form
sell
be sold
countries
they have their gig on.
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country
This
way of life and positive culture of appreciating art
should be continued. Whilst many people
are able to learn it outside of school
, I believe formal institution
should be a place to nurture students' interest in Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
art
. This
subject is supposed to be mandatory,
since it is highly necessary yet unfortunately not sufficiently addressed in the curriculum worldwide. In Indonesia, Remove the comma
apply
for example
, it has to be taught in elementary, however
becoming
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become
optional
course in high Correct article usage
an optional
school
. By giving art
an equal time in the learning process, it would give
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have
positive
impact by enhancing student well-being and developing student emotional quotient.
In conclusion, I believe that the arts are still highly enjoyed by the Correct article usage
a positive
people
. While
this
be
most Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
way of life, nurturing Change noun form
people's
art
through school
should be an option as it brings positive influence for the students.Submitted by aldawinonaz on
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