The arts, including art, music and theatre are considered to be important in society. Do you think the arts still have a place amongst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in school programs?
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task achievement
Focus on directly addressing the question prompt in your introduction and throughout your essay. Make sure to give a clear opinion on whether the arts should be included in school programs.
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Develop your arguments with more detailed examples and explanations. While you provide some examples, deeper insights will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct main idea. Use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas both within and between paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, make sure to succinctly summarize your main points and restate your opinion to ensure a strong finish to your essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite