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the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries

the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries
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The given line graphs represent the
wheat
 export trend of 3 different
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region
regions
 including: Canada, Australia, and European countries
dusring
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during
 the years between 1985 and 1990 in
million
tonnes
.
Overall
, the most
wheat
 export took place
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from
 Canada and the less one
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 to Australia. At the start of the period, Canada had
experted
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expected
exported
 slightly less than 20
million
tonnes
 of
wheat
then
 it soared to 25
million
tonnes
 in 1988. In
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 around 10 years it sharply
had
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droped
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dropped
 to less than 15
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 and
afterward
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 experienced
a
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relatively fast growth and reached about 18
million
tonnes
 of
wheat
 in 1990.
Ausralia
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Australia
 and European
contries
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countries
had
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started a approximately
contant
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constant
content
 exportation of
wheat
frome
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from
 1985 to 1988,
flatcuating
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fluctuating
 more or less around 15
million
tonnes
. Frome 1988,
Austraila's
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Australia's
wheat
 export had a slight decline to around 12
million
tones
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tonnes
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1989
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in 1989
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 and remained constant
untill
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until
 the end
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 studied
perid
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period
,
while
 European countries have shown a sharp
improvment
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improvement
 in their
wheat
 exportation trend to
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more
 than 20
million
tonnes
 of
wheat
 in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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