The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The given bar chart provides information about how families prefer to spend their
each week
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weekly
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salary in a certain country, in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that, in 1968, the highest amount of money
is
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was
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spent on food,
while
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leisure
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was
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more demanded by people in 2018. Looking at the details, whether, food accounted for most of the expenditures of
housholds
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households
at around 35% of weekly income, its demands saw a downward trend and stayed at 17% in 2018.
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, leisure which had allocated just under 10% of spending to itself, rose to approximately 27%, and became the most families' target
of
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for
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expending
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spending
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, in 2018.
In addition
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, the amount of money
went
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that went
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on fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal goods witnessed a falling
rend
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trend
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,
while
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housing and transport experienced a rising trend. Albeit, individuals spent the same money on
houshold
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household
goods in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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