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Is there any value in studying academic subjects that are not useful in terms of generating wealth for the country?

#value #subjects #terms #wealth #country
Nowadays,
the
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education on total plays an essential part in
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 of countries. Some people are in doubt
it
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if
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 there
any
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 benefits from studying
subjects
 which cannot provide prosperity. It is my firm conviction that all academic studies can offer useful outcomes. I believe that they lead to
life
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the life
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well-being
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and well-being
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 of students.
Also
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 many
subjects
 are not about money, but about literacy. First of all, any knowledge obtained from educational establishments can be
transfered
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transferred
transformed
 into business. Many scientific and technical
subjects
 teach students how to be tech-savvy. So that after graduating some technophiles often develop unique technological devices which are innovative and draw money as investments.
Secondly
, it’s vital for each society to be posted
how
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 things work. Humanitarian
subjects
 make sense to be storied
due to
 bringing awareness about devices, we use use every day.
For instance
, these days most prosperous people can make investments via their smartphone, they are independent about
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their
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 microwave oven
o4
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or
 they prefer a small refrigerator because they know its safety and convenience. I suppose that these pieces of knowledge and about success and survival in the modern completions in the world. In conclusion, I would like to say that academic
subjects
, whatever it is, offer us
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
This
 one can transfer into skills which we can use to make money. Non-economic
subjects
 frequently bring talented individuals
which
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 can make innovations. When it comes to other
subjects
, they can help people gain literacy for well-being in their
life
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lives
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.
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