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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
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The line chart given provides the data on what made
people
 move to the main city of
a certain nations
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certain nations
a certain nation
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. On the whole, Moving for
enployment
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employment
 and study is
more
Correct article usage
the more
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 popular
reasons
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reason
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and
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apply
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than
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 two reasons throughout the
period
 from 2000 to 2015. Most notably, there is a significant increase in the
number
 of
people
 moving
for
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to
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 study. Specifically, the
number
 of
its
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it
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 began the
period
 in 2000
people
 from
approximatelly
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approximately
 25000
people
, and rose to just under 90000
people
. Interestingly, the
number
 of
people
 moving for employment was the highest and increased by the year in 2010 from about 60000 to around 90000, but from
the
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that
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 time,
its
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it
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 decreased to under 90000 by the end of the
period
 in 2015. Cleary, The reasons for family/friends and adventure had by far the low
number
 during
this
period
.Looking more closely, the
number
 of
people
 moving for family/friends
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 under 20000, and for adventure
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 under 3000.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocation
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • educational facilities
  • vibrant lifestyle
  • healthcare access
  • medical services
  • social connections
  • infrastructure
  • transport facilities
  • data trends
  • survey results
  • capital city
  • allure
  • motivating factor
  • influencing
  • attracting
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • assessment
  • consideration
  • exploration
  • introduction
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