Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and on society. Government should introduce measures to restrict ownership to those who need them for their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, having

cellphone

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cellphones

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is increasing among

people

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that

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which

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may

cause

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many

problem

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in case of health issues or negative impacts on

public

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. A number of

people

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argued that government

authoritis

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authorities

ough

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to put

limitation

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limitations

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on owning personal

phones

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This

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essay

has

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disagree

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disagreeing

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statement as

although

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using

smart

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smartphones

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phones

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may

cause

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health

problem

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problems

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and lack of concentration,I think

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the govenment

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govenment

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government

should teach society how to benefit

and

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from and

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avoid

harmful

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the harmful

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aspects of smartphones. Having smartphones may

cause

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people

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get

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familier

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familiar

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with

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modern technology and advanced media which can help them

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apply

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not only communicate with

people

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but

also

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they can provide

whar

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what

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they want through

online-shops

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online shops

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Numerouse

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Numerous

Apps are designed to

making

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daily life as easy as possible. By using cellphones,

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, for shopping, eighter groceries or clothes,

people

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are not forced to tolerate traffic jams or crowded malls.

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, they have a chance to check and evaluate any features ranging from price, material, and,even time of

deliverty

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delivery

. bo2:

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, The more using cellphones grow

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, the less

people

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can concentrate on any special topics. Attractive areas, especially in social media, would

ditracted

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distracted

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people

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and may be harmful

for

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their eyes.

Smart

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phones

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have

scary

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abillity

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ability

to engage

people

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,especially adolecens and that

cause

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many issues

such

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as sitting for

long

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time, neck

injury

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and

problem

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problems

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with

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vision.

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apply

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smartphones by providing

wild

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range of accessibility may be extremely beneficial,they would

many

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drawbacks if they

used

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were used

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without regulation.In my opinion,

government

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the government

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should

impled

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implement

some

sterategies

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strategies

to teach society how

people

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benefit

their

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from their

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high-tech

cellphone

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cellphones

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instead

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limit

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ownerships

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ownership

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. Indubitably,

smart

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smartphones

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phones

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are

inseparable

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an inseparable

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part of daily life. In conclusion,

smarphones

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smartphones

not

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only

use

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used

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for some jobs, but

also

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can make life easier.

Put

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restriction

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on them

are

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not essential way, I think.

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government

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the government

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should

designed

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design

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some approaches to

teach

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teaching

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people

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how to use

cellphones

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cell phones

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possitively

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positively

without

health harming

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health-harming

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lossing

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losing

concentration.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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309 words

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