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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar charts
compares
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billion
dollars
 of funds provided to developing countries from five organizations between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
, the vast
mojarity
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majority
 of money was given by
the
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organization
 3 from 2008 to 2009 whilst
the
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organisation 2 exceeded it in 2010 and kept the leading role in 2011 as well.
According to
 the information shown in the graph,
the
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organization
 3 donated 1,5
billion
dollars
 to developing countries in 2008 and the amount of money
was
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insreased
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increased
 to 1.7
billion
dollars
 after a year.
However
 , the donation from
the
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organization
 2 soared in 2010 which was almost l
billion
dollars
 more than that in 2009 by 1.5
billion
dollars
 in 2009 and 2.4
billion
dollars
 in 2010. Their donation reached 2.6
billion
dollars
 in 2011. Unlike the rising funds from
the
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organization
 2, the money from
the
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organization
 5 kept reducing in the given time which plummeted from 1.2
billion
dollars
 to 0.4
billion
dollars
 with 3
times
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3-times
 reduction.
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  • amount of money
  • developing countries
  • organisations
  • from 2008 to 2011
  • given to
  • funding
  • analyze
  • examine
  • discuss
  • evaluate
  • explore
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • trends
  • data
  • chart
  • purpose
  • overview
  • key findings
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