the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
The chart
give
information about the amount of total electric Change the verb form
gives
expandation
for production and consumption in the top ten countries in 2014.
Correct your spelling
expansion
Overall
, it is clear that
there is noticeable
Correct word choice
a difference
in
the two categories of Change preposition
between
chart
. China and Add an article
the chart
United
States had total electricity used much Correct article usage
the United
than
others. Correct quantifier usage
more than
In addition
, Korea. Rep was the countries had
the lowest Correct pronoun usage
that had
kWh
over the period.
Details, the amount of electric
spent for production and consumption Replace the word
electricity
of
China was the largest, about 5,396 Change preposition
in
kWh
and 5322 kWh
respectively. Moreover
, the second rank was the United States with about 1000 kWh
less in both categories. By contrast
, Russia, Japan and India had nearly a third to compare with the US, approximately 900 kWh
for production and consumption share
On the other hand
, Canada, France and Brazil had 30 percent
less than Change the spelling
per cent
above
group, followed by Germany and Correct article usage
the above
Korean
were the lowest categories in both types of electric use.Correct your spelling
Korea
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