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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter Remind your employer what the course was about. Explain why the course was useful to you in your work Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues.

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Dear Mr Sam Mathews, I am writing
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 letter in regard to
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 which I enrolled in for training purposes. The
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 is of 1 month duration and
about
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 machine learning. It was very useful for me to complete the
course
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. The
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 has been taught in
very
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 interesting manner. The
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 will prove beneficial in my job, as some of the concepts were used in
current
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 project. The project has some challenging assignments, and the
course
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 tips will come
handy
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 to tackle those challenges. Specially
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 has given me
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 to complete the project on time.
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, the
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 has some
constraint
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 like machine learning concepts
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apply
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 and deep thinking of software algorithms. It is not a wise choice to enrol other members in my team as they are part of
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 and QA Team. For
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course
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 will not be useful at all. Hope
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 helps. Yours Faithfully, Jim Marsh

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coherence cohesion
Include a proper introduction and conclusion in your letter to enhance its structure. This helps guide the reader through your points and emphasizes the professionalism of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or point. This will help in making your arguments clear and easy for the reader to follow. Consider revising to ensure each paragraph contains a distinct point related to your feedback on the training course.
task achievement
While you have addressed the tasks given, there's room to provide more detailed examples and explanations on how the course was beneficial and why it may not be suitable for certain colleagues. Expanding on your reasons and examples would strengthen your task response.
task achievement
Maintaining a consistent and suitable writing tone throughout the letter is crucial. Your tone is generally appropriate, but ensure that the language used is formal enough for a professional setting, and avoid any colloquialisms or overly casual expressions.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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