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Weddings are more expensive in many countries nowadays when compared to the past . What is the reason behind this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Currently,
weddings
 spend more much budget in some countries if we compare how these events were conducted in the past.
This
 issue is a negative development, and I strongly believe that it was
due to
 individuals' lifestyles and how big dreams and expectations of the couple regarding their wedding.
Firstly
, currently, many
people
 tend to spend their money on wedding
party was
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due to
 their lifestyle. Individuals
that
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who
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 have a
high standard
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 lifestyle prefer to create an extraordinary wedding
party
 for the public.
Although
,
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 it will allocate a lot of money, it is not necessary. Because they aim to show their economic status and impress the public with how wonderful the
party
 was conducted by wealthy families.
As a result
, they tend to choose many expensive staffs that are served by vendors or purchase these items from supermarkets.
For example
, individuals who come from rich families as CEO families tend to purchase high-quality wedding dresses at the highest price from designers or popular supermarkets or stores. They
also
 usually prefer great quality decorating services which
requires
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 expensive prices.
Secondly
, conducting expensive
weddings
 is
also
 caused by how big expectations of the couple over their wedding
party
. The majority of
people
 think that a wedding is the type of event
that is
 conducted once only during
entire
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their entire
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 life. They want to hold a perfect wedding
party
 which will become valuable memories in their life.
That is
 why couples tend to purchase the perfect concepts for their
weddings
 to provide
a
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the
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 greatest memorable
party
. They are often inspired by several concepts in Disney cartoons, namely princess concept-setting wedding. It requires a variety
decoration
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 elements to be arranged in their wedding.
For example
,
artists
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artist
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called Rachel Venya
is
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was
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 inspired by the
snow white
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 princess stories,
then
 she implemented a concept from
this
 story which needs many kinds of stuff. Genuinely, it will enhance the number of budgets.
To conclude
, as mentioned earlier, the majority of
people
 tend to build an expensive wedding
due to
people
's lifestyle and how big dreams and expectations from
couple's
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couples'
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weddings
. It is
such
 a negative development which raises folk's consumptive character.
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