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Some say that the best way to help poor countries is financial aids. Other say other forms of aid should be given. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some

poeple

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people

believe that giving financial

aids

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aid

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to poor countries is a good way to help them. Others,

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, deem that there are other kinds of aid which can sum up against poor nations' plight. In

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essay, we will analyse these two different points of view and

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, my opinion will be given. One of the most

difunded

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difficult

way

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to solve some

problem

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problems

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is investing

money

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on

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in

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measures which are capable

for

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of

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decreasing bad circumstances.

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, if a country is suffering

for

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from

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lack

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of water, others can send them an amount to finance pit

constructions

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. It is a measure which

have

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practical effects on the

reallity

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reality

and because of that, many

poeple

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people

believe that it is the best way to deal with

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situation

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.

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, advocates of helping others with another kind of aid, say that in many cases, giving

money

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is not the best solution. For them, several times

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financial help does not achieve the real

propose

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because of the corruption engrained in the local management. Because of

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, most of

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money

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get

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lost and

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do

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arrives

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in

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its destination, which in fact is a huge problem faced by underdeveloped nations.

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, aids have to be thought to achieve the root of the problem and

than

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,

making

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it be ceased.

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, in places where are

accurring

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occurring

war, humanitarian aids are much more positive than giving them

money

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.

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, it is possible to note that both points of view have their motivations to believe that they have the best solution. In my opinion,

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, the measure to be taken depends on each case. We have to look

to

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each reality and see the possibilities and how the aid can provide an effective impact on the circumstance.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

6

Logical structure

7

Introduction & conclusion present

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Supported main points

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Accurate linking words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Varied vocabulary

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

296 words

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