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The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates teen
pregnancy
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 age from 15 to 19
rates
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 in first-level nations among the fifteen nations between 1985 and 2019. Units measured in thousands.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 America and New Zealand had the highest
rates
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 of teenage
pregnancy
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while
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 Denmark and Slovenia had the lowest
rates
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 of
pregnancy
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. Norway and Sweden had similar
rates
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. The highest teenage
pregnancy
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 of the United States and New Zealand
were
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 around 24000.
Similarly
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, Canada and Republic
has
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 the same
number
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 of teen
pregnancies
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, which accounts for 1000 girls.
Likewise
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, Iceland, Norway, and Sweden have the same
number
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 of teenage
pregnancies
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, at 6000 girls. Solvak Republic's teen
pregnancy
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 was 20000
while
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 Hingery had 18000. Denmark and Slovenia had the lowest
number
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 of teen
pregnancies
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 among other developed nations, at 4000 girls respectively.
Furthermore
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, Australia has the
number
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if
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of
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 teenage
pregnancies
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, which accounts for 14000. Teen
pregnancy
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of
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in
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 Belgium had just 8000 and 7000
of
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apply
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teenage
pregnancies
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 in Finland.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pregnancy, rates, number, pregnancies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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