some perants buy their children a large number of toys to play with. what are the advantages and disadvantaged for the child of having a large number of toys

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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Start by introducing the topic, then discuss both advantages and disadvantages in separate paragraphs, and conclude by summarizing your main points or providing a final opinion.
Coherence
Focus on organizing your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to state the main idea, followed by supporting sentences that explain or exemplify your point.
Cohesion
To improve cohesion, use linking words and phrases such as 'furthermore', 'in addition', 'on the other hand', and 'consequently'. These help to guide the reader through your argument in a logical way.
Task Response
Address the task more effectively by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of having a large number of toys. Ensure your ideas are specific and directly related to the topic. Support your arguments with examples or reasons.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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