The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.

The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.
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diagram compares the difference between California,
Utal
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Utah
and
Florida
in four
catorgies
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categories
(age, income of a person and the
population
below
poverty
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the poverty
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line).
Overall
,
Utal
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Utah
and
Florida
had the highest
population
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aged under 18 and over 60 respectively. Meanwhile,
Florida
and Utal shared the lowest number of citizens aged under 18 and over 60 respectively. California has
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difference
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the average income per person ($) compared to the
population
below poverty.
Utal
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Utah
had 28% of
population
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the population
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under 18 years old
while
there was 16% of
population
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the population
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under 18 years old in
Florida
, which their difference was less than double. When it comes to the people above 60 years old, the proportion of that in Utal was 8% meanwhile the proportion of that in
Florida
was 23%, which was nearly triple
of
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the percentage in Utal.
Although
residents in California earned the
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average
income per person ($) among
three
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countries with $23, 00, she
also
indicated the highest percentage of people who lived below
poverty
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line
with
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16%.
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