The graph below gives information about computer possession by household in one European country between 1997 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about computer possession by household in one European country between 1997 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Computer
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A computer
The computer
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that
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apply
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possessed
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is possessed
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by each family is illustrated by a line graph to show how many
computer
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computers
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are there in each
household
in
European
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Europe
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in the period of 1997 to 2001. In the
beggining
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beginning
,
household
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households
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without
computers
took the highest portion in 1997 with more than 45%
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of accomodation
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accomodation
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accommodations
had
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having
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no
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with no
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computers
.
However
, after that year, the amount of
household
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households
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possessed
keep
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kept
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declining until 2011 and reached the lowest data of under 30%.
Next,
the two and only one
computers
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computer's
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possession are
quiet
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quite
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the same when these both categories
were together increase
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together increased
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. At
first,
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a family
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family
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families
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with 2
computers
contained had
the
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a
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percentage of
beneth
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beneath
15% but
this
number
rapidly
jump
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jumped
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up after 1997 and
become
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became
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trend
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a trend
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until 2011 with a massive total portion (nearly 30%) in that year.
On the other hand
,
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the household
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household
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households
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had
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that had
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1
computer
only
has
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had
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a worse start when there were no houses
possessed
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that possessed
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at
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apply
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the
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apply
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1
computer
until 1999, after that peak,
this
number
slightly
increase
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increased
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, along the
timelenghth
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time length
and in 2011
this
number
reached 7,5% or higher.
According to
the graph, 3 or more
computer
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computers
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possessed in
European
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Europe
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has
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have
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the highest percentage
along
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over
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the time period. It was 45% in 1997
,
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apply
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and took the highest place among the households with
computers
applied shown in the graph. After 1997,
this
number
is likely to fall
down
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apply
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a little bit
then
go up and maintain the impressive percentage again after that.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, household, computers, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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