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THE INCREASING AVAILABILITY OF LOW-COSTING AIRLINES NOW LETS PEOPLE TRAVEL AROUND THE WORLD. SOME FEEL THIS IS A POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IS NEGATIVE OVERALL.

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THE INCREASING AVAILABILITY OF LOW-COSTING AIRLINES NOW LETS PEOPLE TRAVEL AROUND THE WORLD. SOME FEEL
THIS
 IS A POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT
WHILE
 OTHERS THINK
THAT IS
 NEGATIVE
OVERALL
. Nowadays, more citizens have been travelling in any distance of the world
due to
 affordable
cost
 opportunities. Some consider
this
 as a great opportunity to travel
WHILE
 others have
opposite
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 side in
this
 view. There are various reasons why enhancing
amount
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 of cheap airlines has
positive
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 effect on society. First of all, affordable
cost
 airlines might be boosted
budget
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 of
airocompanies
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air companies
 on account of travel abroad with relative ease.
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, most less affluent citizens would be able to great amenities for rising
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 deal of their horizon.
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,
low
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cost
 transportation must increase
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tourism aspects and help economic well-being.
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, from a ticket
cost
 may be reasonable, aeroplanes
delivers
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a
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 hour faster than
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a car
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car
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 and it makes
possible
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 to create enjoyments to choice.
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, acceptable plane tickets have
lead
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negative despite
of
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overcrowding or unsatisfactory service availability. It seems that flights may
as
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 well
delays
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since
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 uncontrolled
individual's
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 capacity or congestion.
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,
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increased
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low pricing
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plan
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plane
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 provides
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with
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beneficial aspects like economic advantages,
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and tourist's
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and tourist's
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tourist's
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opportunities
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opportunity
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, but it can lead
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to drawbacks
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drawbacks
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due to
 overcrowded and low customer service.
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction provides a clear statement of your position or thesis. This will help readers understand your viewpoint from the beginning.
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Work on developing your ideas more fully with relevant examples. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by explanations or examples that support it.
coherence and cohesion
Improve your writing's logical structure by clearly organizing your essay into paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea. Use transition words to help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, clearly state your overall standpoint again, summarizing how your arguments support this view. A strong conclusion reinforces your main points.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Global mobility
  • Convenience
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural exchange
  • Enhanced connectivity
  • Drawbacks
  • Sustainable travel
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