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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare the data about
water
use
 in the world and some selected countries, namely,
China
,
India
, New
Zealand
 and
Canada
 in 2000.
Overall
, what stands out from the charts is that most of the
water
 was used for
agriculture
 and
India
 was responsible for it mostly. Another interesting point is that people who live in
Canada
used
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use
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water
 mostly for industry. Looking into detail, the
use
 of
water
for
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all over the world for
agriculture
was
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accounted for more than
a
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half, precisely,70%,
while
 domestic reasons made up only 8% of the whole. The remainder, industry, constituted just over
a
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one-fifth, with 22%. With regard to the countries,
China
 used
water
 mostly for
agriculture
 with 69%,
whereas
 that of
India
 made up 92%.
Water
use
 for
agriculture
 in New
Zealand
 and
Canada
 was less than the others with 44% and 8% respectively. The
use
 of
water
 for industry was the highest in
Canada
 with
four fifths
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,
however
 other countries,
China
,
India
 and New
Zealand
 accounted for 22%, 3% and 10% respectively. Regarding
water
use
 for domestic, New
Zealand
 ranked first with nearly
a
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half (46%) and
Canada
 and
China
 shared joint second place with 12% and 9%.
That of
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India
 was the
least
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last
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 one with 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, china, india, zealand, canada, agriculture with synonyms.
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