what do you think are the advntages and disadvantages of nuying clothes online?
It is known that we live in technology times and it makes pair of jeans online for his special day but the jeans came after 3 days and my friend sent them back again when he tried the jeans and he did not like them.
as
comfortable our life, Correct your spelling
us
also
has some bad Linking Words
side
. Changed our shopping culture Fix the agreement mistake
sides
while
technology Linking Words
develop
, a Wrong verb form
developed
lot
of people Use synonyms
use
Wrong verb form
used
to
Change preposition
apply
online
Add an article
the online
an online
system
to Fix the agreement mistake
systems
buying
their Wrong verb form
buy
clothes
. Of course, it has some advantages and disadvantages. I going to explain is Use synonyms
a
bad and good Correct article usage
the
sides
of Correct the article-noun agreement
side
this
essay and give my opinion in the concluding paragraph.
On the one hand, buying Linking Words
clothes
online is so fun and cheaper than real shopping. One advantage of online shopping is we can change if you do not like your product. Another advantage is do not need to spend our Use synonyms
time
shopping. As Use synonyms
every body
Correct your spelling
everybody
know
, if you want to buy some Correct subject-verb agreement
knows
clothes
you should go to the mall or street stores Use synonyms
that
Linking Words
is
not a good choice if you do not have enough Change the verb form
are
time
. Use synonyms
For example
, my cousin AliLinking Words
,
is a Remove the comma
apply
business man
and does not want to go to real stores. He chose the online system because he can find there a Correct your spelling
businessman
lot
of types Use synonyms
Use synonyms
clothes
and as he says they are so economical.
Change preposition
of clothes
On the other hand
, buying online Linking Words
clothes
has some disadvantages which are Use synonyms
first,
about quality ( there Linking Words
are
not good quality every Correct subject-verb agreement
is
time
and we can not understand till cargo gives us the product) Use synonyms
second,
there are have face online sites on the internet and we can lose our money if we use the sites. Linking Words
third,
online shopping needs Linking Words
time
for delivery because the fabric sent to you the product maybe from another city. Use synonyms
minimum
cargo Capitalize word
Minimum
time
is needed 3 days nowadays. Use synonyms
for instance
, one of my Linking Words
friend
boughtChange to a plural noun
friends
Correct article usage
a
To sum up
, online shopping has a Linking Words
lot
of advantages but does not every Use synonyms
things
especially for Change to a singular noun
thing
clothes
because Use synonyms
clothes
are personality, it is not general. in my opinion, we will buy our Use synonyms
clothes
online if we can try them online. İmagane, you have a photo on the online site and you can put every Use synonyms
clothes
in your photo and you can see and understand Use synonyms
it
is for you suit you or not. we can try a Correct word choice
if it
lot
of Use synonyms
clothes
in a Use synonyms
some
minutes, Correct determiner usage
few
that is
a big advantage. I would buy all my Linking Words
clothes
if the technology had online shopping.Use synonyms
Submitted by ares.grup on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
structure
Enhance the structure of your essay by having a clear introduction, at least two body paragraphs discussing advantages and disadvantages separately, and a well-defined conclusion. This will better organize your thoughts and make your essay more coherent.
cohesion
Improve your coherence by linking your ideas more clearly. Use cohesive devices such as 'however', 'moreover', 'for instance', to make transitions between sentences smoother and to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task completion
For task achievement, ensure you provide a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages. Then, clearly state your opinion in the conclusion. This will make your response more complete.
task explanation
To further improve your task achievement score, focus on providing clearer and more comprehensive explanations of the ideas you introduce. Avoid making general statements without offering detailed explanations or examples to support them.
grammar
Check your essay for grammatical errors and typos. Improving your grammar and spelling will make your points clearer and more professionally presented.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.