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You are taking a course at a local college. The deadline for your project was last week but you have not finished it. Introduce yourself Explain why you haven't handed in the project yet Request more time to do it

#course #college #deadline #project #week #haven #request #time
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why
l
 am addressing you is that
l
 want to inform
about
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you about
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 the deadline
a
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for a
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project
was
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last
 week but I have not finished it yet and
also
 request you more
time
 to do it. I have been studying for 3 years
in
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at
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 your Ilm
nuri
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 college and I have some important information about
college
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the college
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. My name is Sitora. I am
student
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a student
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 4 course.
l
 explain why
l
 have not handed in the
project
 yet. I have been flu
that is
, ill for a week and staying in the hospital.
Beside
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 that my computer
need
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 to
fixed
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. It's damaged. Unfortunately,
l
do
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 not
go to
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gone
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 home yet because
l
 need
to
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treatment in the hospital. I request more
time
 to do it because I have more
time
. I
am regret
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 the deadline for my
project
 was
last
 week but I have not
finished
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finished it
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. I believe that you give me for
this
project
. I hope you will understand
this
 problem and will give me more
time
 for
this
 situation. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Bakhriddinova Sitora
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coherence cohesion
Your letter could be significantly improved by organizing your ideas more clearly. Start with an introduction that directly addresses your purpose. Then, have distinct paragraphs detailing the reason for the delay, your request, and a polite conclusion. This would make your letter more coherent and easy to follow.
task achievement
To better engage with the Task Achievement criteria, make sure your letter directly answers all parts of the task prompt more clearly and effectively. This includes introducing yourself briefly, explaining the reason for your delay in detail, and requesting an extension clearly and politely. Adding specific examples or evidence could also strengthen your case, such as mentioning the dates you were hospitalized or providing a note from your doctor.
coherence cohesion
Your letter's clarity can be improved by focusing on sentence structure and grammar. Ensure each sentence expresses a complete and clear idea. Avoid run-on sentences or overly complex sentences where simple ones will suffice. This will enhance the readability of your letter.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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